THe personal Statement is your gateway to getting an interview.
At the very least, you should ensure that the personal statement is not the part of your application that is going to hurt you. You can do this by making sure you avoid what I like to call “the major 8 red flags.” Unfortunately, I see these red flags far too often in student essays.
These include:
- Writing any form of: “I like science, I want to help people and I like working with my hands” as your motivation to become a dentist
- Comparing yourself to other applicants and trying to argue why you would be better
- Stating something about your life that isn’t true
- Talking badly about another healthcare professional
- Stating that you know you have the skills that will make you a great dentist without showing it
- Saying that you know what it is like to be a dentist or explaining the roles of the dentist
- Long explanations of extracurriculars, where you will bore the reader
- Any statement that sounds negative, unappreciative, condescending, elitist, or superficial
Now let's get into each one in a little more detail.
1. Writing any form of “I like science, I want to help people and I like working with my hands” as your motivation to become a dentist.
The first red flag is writing any form of “I like science, want to help people and I like working with my hands” as your motivation to become a dentist. Seriously, you would not believe how many times this comes up and it is so cliché! A lot of people will try to make it fancy and say, “I integrated my love for science with my passion for human connection and hand-eye coordination, so I decided I wanted to be a dentist.”
That is just not going to cut it.
The readers of these essays on the admissions committee see this time and time again. It is not unique and is very much forced. Think about it for a second: Is that truly the reason that you wanted to be a dentist? You should be thinking a little deeper and try to get into what really fueled that desire. Reflect on what you learned along that journey that really solidified that you want to go down this long and difficult path.
2. Comparing yourself to other applicants and trying to argue why you would be better
You definitely want to avoid this second red flag, comparing yourself to other applicants and trying to argue why you would be better. You do not need to compare yourself to other applicants when writing the personal statement. Actually, let me take it one step further. You SHOULD NOT do this on your personal statement! The personal statement is a way to show who you are as a person, as well as why you want to be a dentist. It is not to sell yourself as if you're in a competition with other potential applicants.
3. Stating something about your life that isn’t true
I wish I didn't have to elaborate on the statement, but unfortunately I do. There is no room for embellishing or making up something on your application. This is extremely unprofessional and will have severe consequences if you are caught. It could potentially ruin all the hard work that you've put in to get to where you are. You do not have to lie to get into dental school. You just need to work hard, be yourself, and have the right systems in place (which is why you’re reading this book).
4. Talking badly about another healthcare professional
I kept this broad on purpose. I actually see this situation a decent amount of times with student essays, where they discuss a bad experience they had while shadowing a dentist or other healthcare professions. They talk about how that fueled their desire to be a dentist so that, “no other patients would have to experience that type of treatment that [they] experienced.” One reason I would avoid this topic in a personal statement, is that you don't want to sound critical or as if you're “trashing” a dentist or someone else in the healthcare field. In addition, you do not know who the person interviewing you knows - maybe that dentist is a close friend. You want to keep your personal statement positive at all times - try to avoid the negative.
Speaking negatively about another dentist or doctor is not going to look good in the personal statement, even though it might be a true story. I'm positive there are many more stories you can discuss, rather than talking about one bad experience you had as being the reason that you want to now be a dentist. While you can mention it and it may come up in interviews, I would be very careful with how you talk about the experience.
Also, let's be honest: It wasn't your bad experience that truly made you want to become a dentist. Maybe that was a reason that you're factoring into the equation, but it simply doesn’t make sense that you are deciding to devote your entire career path to dentistry, a long hard career with a high burnout rate, because you had a “bad” experience? The goal of the personal statement is to demonstrate that you understand what you're getting yourself into, as well as your passion in helping patients and embarking on a journey to learn the skills to do.
5. Stating that you know you have the skills that will make you a great dentist
This might be the most frequent piece of advice I give pre-dental students on their personal statements. Most students try to sell themselves to the admissions committee and state the different skills that they think they have that are going to make them a great dentist. Some students emphasize their hand skills, intelligence and qualities. The admissions committee does not want to read all the amazing adjectives that you guys come up with to describe yourself. Saying you are hardworking is not enough. Tell me a story of a time when you were hardworking, so that I can independently come to the conclusion. Saying that you have a lot of empathy is not enough. Show me a time when you were empathetic towards a patient, so that I can independently conclude what your character traits are.
Your goal is to use stories to paint a picture of who YOU are, not to explicitly state it. This is because when you do the latter it doesn’t come off as genuine or personalized. It could truly be anyone writing that essay. The admissions committee wants to know specifics about you as a student and who you are as a person. The only way to do that is from stories about you. Therefore, the more anecdotes you have in your personal statement, the better.
6. Saying that you know what it is like to be a dentist or the roles of the dentist
I can't tell you the number of students who write, “the role of a dentist is to….” You might have a good idea of what a dentist does, but I would avoid assuming that you know what all the responsibilities entail. A common template I see students use involves stating different roles and then why they would fit into those roles. Again, this is not the goal of the personal statement. Just try to show who you are as a person!! Let the admissions committee come to conclusion themselves of whether you’d be a good candidate for their school. Focus on showing why you're unique, and before you say “but Dan I'm not unique”, you should know that you are. No person is the same as anyone else. So you being you is your uniqueness. Now you just have to let that shine through your writing. Again, this is not easy to do and if you feel that you are struggling with it, you may want to check out my advising program in more detail (http://theprehealthconsultants.com/dental). We help with just that!
7. Long explanations of extracurriculars
There is a place for this in your application already. Please do not make your personal statement sound like an enhanced resume.
8. Any statement that sounds negative, unappreciative, condescending, elitist, or superficial
I'm just going to hope that no further explanation is needed for this last red flag.